14 March. New Futures Workshop.

Announcements

  • 1. Remember to bring your New Futures “object” to class on March 26
  • 2. If you are a panel presenter today and have not already done so, please email your draft or share a Google Doc with me.

Part I: Video Essay Panel Presentations


Class Section Presenters
1102.F3 Luke, Le, Anna, Nicolas, Morgan, Thomas, Catherine, Gabriel
1102.HP3 Nicholas, Mohan, Joshua, Azhar, & Richard
1102.D3 Anu, Nikhil, Lily, Andrew, Brian, Jennifer, Shachi, Siddartha

Guidelines

Presenters, please be prepared to discuss the following for no longer than 5 minutes.
  • 1. How does your future world solve for the problem you think poses the greatest threat to continued existence to life on earth?
  • 2. What are the five, or so, elements of your future you describe in your project, and how are those social elements interrelated?
  • 3. Briefly take us through your writing process. For example, what is one sentence level choice you have made to better engage audiences, develop transitions from idea to idea, or flush out detail?

Part II: Peer Response Groups

In the time remaining, please form small peer response groups with each presenter (approx. 1 presenter and 2 students). Then take turns discussing the following:
  • 1.How does your future world solve for the problem you think poses the greatest threat to continued existence to life on earth?
  • 2.What are the five, or so, elements of your future you describe in your project, and how are those social elements interrelated?
  • 3.Briefly take us through your writing process. For example, what is one sentence level choice you have made to better engage audiences, develop transitions from idea to idea, or flush out detail?

Part III. Verb Revision

Revise: State-of-being verbs (to be)/Passive Voice

  • A state of being verb identifies who or what a noun is, was, or will be. Passive voice (grammatical subject expressed the theme of the main verb – that is, the person or thing that undergoes the action or has its state changed).

    Replace the state-of-being verb/passive voice in the sentences below with a strong verb (i.e.a verb that shows instead of tells)

  • The tiger was the upset when the antelope ran away.

    The man was walking on the platform.

    There are three things that make me feel excited for spring break.

Revise: Verbs that rely on adverbs

  • Powerful verbs are strong enough to stand alone. They don’t need an adverb to qualify them.

    Replace the following verb/adverb phrases with powerful verbs:

  • The fox ran quickly through the forest.

    She looked menacingly at her rival.

    He secretly listened while they discussed their plans.

Revise: Have/has/had combined with a noun

  • While auxiliary verbs help express times and mood (and conjugate past and future perfect tenses), they are less likely to engage audiences in simple conjugations and/or when used in excess.

    Replace the following verb phrases with a single, powerful verb:

  • had an argument with the referee

    had dinner with the sheriff.

    I have discussed the situation with your father.

Revising Your Verbs:

  • Take five minutes to identify all the verbs in one paragraph of your draft, and replace verbs that rely auxiliary constructions and/or adverbs with “strong verbs.”

List of Strong Verbs

LIST-OF-STRONG-VERBS

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